During 2018’s A-Z Challenge, we wrote the first draft of “The November Deadline” and to celebrate that this is now (finally) out with beta readers, we’ll be producing a daily piece of micro-fiction linked to it – some prequel, some containing a detail not included in the story, some snippets from sequels currently being written.
“What do you reckon, doc?” I know that voice, Charlie thought.
“It’s difficult to know, Mr… er… Blind.” Charlie couldn’t see the doctor, but he sounded peeved. “The patient’s breathing on his own, which is a good sign, but he’s not yet returned to consciousness, although there is no sign of physical injuries beyond some significant bruising.”
“It’s been days!”
“Quite so. It’s rare, but not unusual. It’s best to be… prepared… though.”
Charlie felt his hand gripped, hard.
“Buck up old son, come home to us.”
“No!” Charlie screamed. “Don’t leave me, Uncle Billy!”
“His eye twitched then, doc.”
© 2021, David Jesson & Debra Carey
This reminded me of a Grey’s anatomy episode where the doctors figure out that a guy supposed to be in coma is actually in a state of sleep from which he is unable to wake up due to some reason!
Nicely done…Visiting from AtoZ here….
https://pagesfromjayashree.blogspot.com/2021/04/c-curses-and-charms.html
I am also interested in flash fiction and story writing….Will take a look at the info about those in more detail sometime….
Sample of a flashfiction I wrote a few years ago…Would love to hear what you think – https://pagesfromjayashree.blogspot.com/2012/11/flash-fiction100-subdued.html
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Thanks! I have to confess I’ve never watched Grey’s Anatomy, but I don’t think the story is any anyway unique! The question, of course, is whether Charlie is coming back to us…or not…
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Sad, scary, confusion for the narrator. The POV took me a few moments to realized what was really happening. I like that my brow furrowed.
Thanks, Debs
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Thanks Stu, I’m afraid I can’t claim kudos for this one. I felt the same way as you when I first read it.
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Had to read it twice to figure out what was happening.
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Hi Liam – thanks for dropping by. Hopefully it was worth reading twice!
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Catching up on A-Z reading. This is a great snippet. Enjoying these glimpses into the work!
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Hi Iain, thanks for dropping by. I’m massively late to A-Z reading this year, but will be visiting shortly 🙂
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Always tricky to keep up with the A-Z reading, so much of it!
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